Happy Birthday?
Huh…., I’m bored playing video games all day I thought to myself. At the weekend I always play video games and was bored of video games. So, I asked my Dad if we could go and do something somewhere, as I was really bored. He thought to himself and said he has the perfect idea, we quickly got changed and ready to leave. I asked my Dad “Where are we going?” I said. He then replied “We're going to a birthday party”.
When we’re going inside the car something was bugging me about something. I realise we didn’t have a present for the birthday party, I didn’t tell my Mum and Dad that we didn’t have a present for the birthday party, they didn’t even notice it. Finally we arrived at my Mum’s friend house? I ask Mum “Why are we in your friend house?” Confusedly ask, she didn’t hear it what I said. I kindly say hello to my friends and say happy birthday to the, (wait!) who’s birthday is it?
While I’m solving that, I didn’t even notice the beautiful food it looks delicious and smell delicious too. So i rapidly grab a plate and a spoon so I can eat it while it's hot. “YUM!!!” Hmpp, I heard someone saying it to me I don’t know who it was, as soon as I realise it was the other visitors. I literally disturb them, I didn’t even know I was disturbing them, I talk back to them “ I really sorry about my behaviour, I said that like and scaredy-cat.
Reige, I really enjoyed reading your story about going to a birthday party. It was interesting to read about being bugged with not having a birthday present with you. You now need to look at re-reading your story and using past tense in your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Reige I really Enjoyed Reading your story. It had some cool stuff in it. when you go and fix it up you could put some Punctuation. That story was amazing But i think that you a capable to to a bit better when you fix it up
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