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This week I decided to edit a review. I looked for many minutes until I found the perfect review to edit.

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Improved game review.

I love this video game. You can join different types of games. It only contains a small amount of violence. In this game you can use rockets, bombs, paintball, guns, bouncy balls, slingshots, and many other things. This game does not involve gory. Your kids can learn about scripting, which is an essential when it comes to video game designing. Parents, they have censored many words that might have an effect on your child’s life. I've run into some people who have the tongue of a sailor meaning a lot of bad words. However, they can  get banned and will never be able to go back on ROBLOX. You can buy many things in the catalog to suit your character. If you’re worrying about money, fear not! It will not cost money, players can earn ingame currency to buy things in the catalog. If you are wanting to be a developer. For example, in the game there are something called decals. Decals can be used for painting many things. This game does not need a lot of mb to download. Administrators are always standing by to make sure your child is safe, like if someone posted a decal of freddy krueger and admin would check the picture and deny it to be uploaded on ROBLOX. So you don't need to worry about anything image wise. There is a 1 in a thousand chance that you will find a game where a player uses inappropriate words. If a player causes some trouble there is a system called report. You can click the report button (you should  write a reason behind this report) and eventually an administrator will check it. The word ‘noob’ is common in most games, it is not something bad. If you did something stupid people would call you a noob. This just means you are new to the game. If you are wanting more information there is a forum for this game. Users get a response almost immediately.

Game review

I love this website. You can go onto games and fight or play minigames or anything. The violence is not bad, you can use rockets/bombs/paintball guns/bouncy balls/slingshots/and many other things. This is not bloody. Your kids can learn about scripting, which is an essential when it comes to video game designing, and you can build whatever you want. Parents, there is no filter with language, I've ran into some people who have a tongue of a sailor. (means they cuss alot) but they get banned and cant get back on ROBLOX. You can buy things in the catalog (not real money, your character earns something called tix/robux that you use to buy other things.) And there is one more thing, ROBLOX players can put anything on their game. You have something called decals that you can paint on walls or your house or anything. Sometimes there is blood on walls, but thats only at like a zombie game or something. This also requires a download to play the games, which isnt alot of MB. Administrators are always standing by to make sure your child is safe, like if someone posted a decal of freddy krueger and admin would check the picture and deny it to be uploaded on ROBLOX. So you dont need to worry about anything image wise. There is a 1 in a thousand change that you will find a game where someone cusses. There is a report button too, that you can click put in the characters name, and tell them what theyve said or done something wrong. And the word "noob"is common. This is not a bad word. If you did something stupid people would call you a noob. This just mean you are new to the game or acting like you are. You can make many friends, and if you have any questions, go to the forum, and ask it. Users respond almost immediately and will help you with your problems.

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